heartache
heartache like feeling you are broken
something is ripped right out of you
heartache wishing you were dead
heartache like losing some part of your self
heartache like losing sight to light
your whole world is shattered into peaces
the world turns black and white
all the sunshine goes out of your heart
anticipation drains out of you
your confidence goes out the window
you view the world from different eyes
heartache resembles ripping of heart
heartbreak is like loosing your seslf in the world
heartache like going through thick fog
and never finding your way back out
3 comments:
Hey Muna! oh my gosh i've always LOVED your poetry it is soo good! you use such colorful language and making connections within your writing that i wouldn't even think about! THis is really well written. My only suggestion would be to take out of the "for you" or "it is" and just state what it is without saying that. Really great job!!
Muna this is an amazing poem! It is really powerful and you use such good descriptive words! It makes me feel like something like that has happened to me even though it really didnt. I agree about taking out the "for you" and "it is" also. By doing that the poem would flow better! Keep up the good work!
WOW muna you are soo goood at poetry writing, you are very good at describing love and when a heart is broken by reading the your poems it explains for its self what it is about because you descriptive writing says it all. I don't have bothing to say about the changing of the poem is fine how it is i guess. great job keep it up gurl.
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